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Number 2, Love

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she's selling bottled
l
o
v
e

in metal containers

so she can
s
e
l
l

her love away.

everything she ever
w h w a o i n p s t e h e d e d
w h w a o i n p s t e h e d
w h w a o i n p s t e h e d

for
in packages
that will
never
be seen
again.
:la:
This is an assignment for English class.
It was a pain to write. D:
BUT I DID IT.
:iconherotimeplz:

I know it's crap but it's for class.
Who's really gonna care?

________________________
#theWrittenRevolution

-Is the format difficult to understand?
-Those jumbled of letters there, can you tell what words I'm trying to say? (I tired bold-ing to maybe make it easier.)
-I know for sure this is poetry. :dummy:
Is the point of the poem clear? Probably not, huh?
-I'm just trying out alliteration, assonance and consonance. Did I do alright, or should I put a little more into it?
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The only part where I had any difficulty with the format was at the jumbled-letters part. I got it eventually but it took me a while. XD (wanted, hoped, and wished right? ._.)
I think that the point of the poem is quite clear, and I love the visual spin you put on it because to me it adds a sort of street-life atmosphere to the piece. :D
I didn't really notice the alliteration, assonance, and consonance which probably means that yes, you may have to put a little more into it.
Hope that helped a bit! :D