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she's selling bottled
so she can
her love away.
everything she ever
for
in packages
that will
never
be seen
again.
l
o
v
e
in metal containers
so she can
s
e
l
l
her love away.
everything she ever
w h w a o i n p s t e h e d e d
w h w a o i n p s t e h e d
w h w a o i n p s t e h e d
for
in packages
that will
never
be seen
again.
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Crucified
Yesterdays never forgotten, here in psychobabylon,
It melds itself into today, and I can never move on
You thought I was .. a problem before.. You ain't seen nothing yet,
Yeah if you thought I was the problem before well you ain't seen nothing yet,
Waiting on the backflow, but I know it just ain't coming yet,
No one ... ever taught me .. .. how to forgive and forget
Disconnected voices, transverse round my head
Artifacts of a yesterday, it will never be dead
You thought I was .. destructive before.. You ain't seen nothing yet,
Yeah if you thought I was a terror before well you ain't seen nothing yet,
Waiting on the bloodflow, but I know i
Literature
There is no dignity in death
"Let's try that again, shall we?"
Literature
Rest In Peace
Rest In Peace: Baby Down Toilet.
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This is an assignment for English class.
It was a pain to write. D:
BUT I DID IT.
I know it's crap but it's for class.
Who's really gonna care?
________________________
#theWrittenRevolution
-Is the format difficult to understand?
-Those jumbled of letters there, can you tell what words I'm trying to say? (I tired bold-ing to maybe make it easier.)
-I know for sure this is poetry.
Is the point of the poem clear? Probably not, huh?
-I'm just trying out alliteration, assonance and consonance. Did I do alright, or should I put a little more into it?
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The only part where I had any difficulty with the format was at the jumbled-letters part. I got it eventually but it took me a while. XD (wanted, hoped, and wished right? ._.)
I think that the point of the poem is quite clear, and I love the visual spin you put on it because to me it adds a sort of street-life atmosphere to the piece.
I didn't really notice the alliteration, assonance, and consonance which probably means that yes, you may have to put a little more into it.
Hope that helped a bit!
I think that the point of the poem is quite clear, and I love the visual spin you put on it because to me it adds a sort of street-life atmosphere to the piece.
I didn't really notice the alliteration, assonance, and consonance which probably means that yes, you may have to put a little more into it.
Hope that helped a bit!